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OT Bush must go!
On 11 Aug 2004 17:59:18 GMT, (Gould 0738) wrote:
Sir:
You know it's time for a change when you hear that Kerry and Edwards
both wrote their own riveting, galvanizing acceptance speeches at the
Democratic National Convention,
Nonsense. If they did, they compared notes beforehand. Both speeches used the
same deliberate devices, some of which were not so subtle.
Do you believe that each wrote his speech separately?
And speaking of mangling the language, can you believe the following is
presented as a single sentence?
I find only two "mangles," one somewhat minor:
You know it's time for a change when you hear that Kerry and Edwards
both wrote their own
This should have been, "each wrote his own."
riveting, galvanizing acceptance speeches at the
Democratic National Convention, heartfelt and effective rhetoric that
gives you hope not for the quality of polished oratory but for
genuine, refreshing political intellect,
When there are more than two items in a series, the last one is not preceded by
a comma.
and verbal acumen, as you
offer deep thanks that at least some politicians can still speak
coherently and cogently without mangling the goddamn language at every
adjectival clause.
With that said, however, I should add that any good editor would have a field
day with this rather convoluted sentence. The last time I looked, there was no
shortage of periods, semicolons and em dashes. The sentence would certainly
have benefited from their use.
Most sincerely,
W.T. Hatch
We do, however, agree on the subject line. :-)
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